Once there was a confident man named Nicholas. One night he thought of something that no one had done before, so the next day he got his swimming gear and put it in his car and drove off to a shallow beach. When he got there he put his swimming gear on and jumped in the water. While he was swimming he looked above him and he saw a huge shark right above him he was so scared so he started swimming out of the water and when he got on land he thought that the thing that I just did was so cool.
Hi Stephen nice job on Your story about diving I like how you put a good amount of detail Into It How long did it take you to make this story i do have 1 tip though Try thinking of a better word than cool.
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Hiero
Kia Ora Stephen. I like that you named the person Nicholas because Nicholas is in our classroom and he's funny. You brought me back when I did my version of this story. Next time, you could include information about the story just to make it a bit more interesting. How long did it take you to do this?.
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Malo e lelei Stephen. Thank you for working so hard on your writing. I like the way that you use descriptive words to describe your story. Keep up the good work, well done.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Stephen my name is Hajir. I am in room 22. I really enjoyed reading your story called catch me if you can .It was really cool. Keep up the good work
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ReplyDeleteI really liked your Catch me if you can story it was really good.
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Hi Stephen my name is Aaron I really enjoyed reading your story called catch
ReplyDeleteme if you can. It was really cool. Where did you come up with the idea? Keep up the great work.
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